Final Essay Project (20%)
Part A: Plan /10 Part B Essay /40
Topic: Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding.
Plan:
Introduction: Everything that people did have a process, whether the consequence is advantageous or not, people who were involved into the process would pay through it, just like people explored the land for their country.
Thesis Statement: Exploration can develop a country but also create conflict and misunderstanding. Animals would suffer a lot because of the strangers who explored their home, different culture and custom created misunderstanding during the exploration and the Native people would face to leave their land or might be die.
Body Paragraph 1
Topic Sentence: Animals became the victims in the explorations.
Body: The Sea Mink, which used to live in the coastal waters of Newfoundland but now it, was eradicated by the fur trade. It was not the only victim, a great deal of animals died by the exploring. Jacques Cartier is one of the famous explorers who traveled around North Passage and discovered those abundant animals in New found land. He exchanged the goods of furs with the Native people by using irons. It’s a disastrous conflict for the nature. Quite soon, the furs of these poor animals became to the clothes, hats and bags for ornamenting people's body in western countries.
Concluding Sentence: There fore, the conflict between people and animals was set up by explorations.
Body Paragraph 2:
Topic Sentence: Moreover, The matter of exploration created a cultural misunderstanding between the Native people and the British.
Body: Comparing those two societies, when the Britain was developing speedily at that time, the Native people still retained customs in primitive way. The completely different cultures between those two kinds of people, creates misunderstandings. They are both stranger to each other, different appearance and language set up a difficult communication when John Cabot discovered the New found land at the first time. The way that the Native people entertained others was such strange action for the English. Before this exploration, the Native people haven't seen the guns or cannon anymore and the English couldn't believe that human can use pigments to represent clothes on their skins.
Concluding Sentence: Hence, there must exist the misunderstanding between the English and Native people because of their different cultures.
Part A: Plan /10 Part B Essay /40
Topic: Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding.
Plan:
Introduction: Everything that people did have a process, whether the consequence is advantageous or not, people who were involved into the process would pay through it, just like people explored the land for their country.
Thesis Statement: Exploration can develop a country but also create conflict and misunderstanding. Animals would suffer a lot because of the strangers who explored their home, different culture and custom created misunderstanding during the exploration and the Native people would face to leave their land or might be die.
Body Paragraph 1
Topic Sentence: Animals became the victims in the explorations.
Body: The Sea Mink, which used to live in the coastal waters of Newfoundland but now it, was eradicated by the fur trade. It was not the only victim, a great deal of animals died by the exploring. Jacques Cartier is one of the famous explorers who traveled around North Passage and discovered those abundant animals in New found land. He exchanged the goods of furs with the Native people by using irons. It’s a disastrous conflict for the nature. Quite soon, the furs of these poor animals became to the clothes, hats and bags for ornamenting people's body in western countries.
Concluding Sentence: There fore, the conflict between people and animals was set up by explorations.
Body Paragraph 2:
Topic Sentence: Moreover, The matter of exploration created a cultural misunderstanding between the Native people and the British.
Body: Comparing those two societies, when the Britain was developing speedily at that time, the Native people still retained customs in primitive way. The completely different cultures between those two kinds of people, creates misunderstandings. They are both stranger to each other, different appearance and language set up a difficult communication when John Cabot discovered the New found land at the first time. The way that the Native people entertained others was such strange action for the English. Before this exploration, the Native people haven't seen the guns or cannon anymore and the English couldn't believe that human can use pigments to represent clothes on their skins.
Concluding Sentence: Hence, there must exist the misunderstanding between the English and Native people because of their different cultures.
Body Paragraph 3:
Topic Sentence: After the misunderstanding, the real conflict occurred on this peaceful land.
Body: An important case of this point was the desire of the English. The fertile land and suitable environment inflame their king's desire to possess the land. In addition, the weapon and technology of the Native people were made sure by the John Cabot during the exploration. Everything about them was much more backward than the English. There was no room for doubt on warfare. The two sides in the war were both in harm, but the catastrophe came down to the Native people could not be averted. The Native people suffered disasters of losing their relations, property and even if their life. The cadavers of Native people can be awarded everywhere; their house and farm were burned away. A foul atmosphere covered the whole land...
Concluding Sentence: There fore, the cause of this cruel conflict is the exploration from England.
Conclusion: All in all, even if captured a land is benefit for the country to develop faster, the process may create lots of conflict and misunderstands. Because of the exploration, people brought on a disaster on others are unfair. Exploring the world is advantageous for people to comprehend the world, but it also can bring the confect if you put it on the wrong side.
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